when the dawn coming the bird is singing on the tree,in front of window.I get up at six o''colck on time every morning.I must wash my face and brash my teeth in ten minute.I have breakfast at seven o''colck.I eat some noodle take in a egg at a time. seven o''colck-twlveo''colck go to gym and play football.I must be back before noon.I have lunch at home,I like chicken,corn and vegetabie.I study in xue le at one o''colck to three o''colck afternoon......Day after day,today is August twenty_sixth. the holiday was coming to an end.名师点评：小作者这篇文章介绍的是自己怎样度过假期的，小作者在文中描述了自己一天的生活，首先是洗脸刷牙吃早餐，接着讲述了去踢足球、吃中饭、上学乐网站等事情。小作者交代得比较细致，让读者对小作者一天的生活有了一些了解。文章句子基本通顺，段落划分得也较为准确，小作者的英文写作能力不错呀！“seven o''''colck-twlveo''''colck go to gym”改为“seven o''clock-twelve o''clock go to game”。（学乐中国特聘教师：王运连老师）2010-1-21 16:49:00